read write poem napowrimo day 14: you want me to write what? write a cleave poem. thanks for the intro nicole to this form. also do stop by nicole’s and take this RWP poll; three word wednesday: brash, lubricate, saint; photo: Morning-call bird, sichun1029, flickr
morning hollars come brash bickering birds
lubricate the lights of night fantasy flying feathers
curtain flowing wind starry saints singing
standing silent stay there’s nothing here weeping
shoreline breaching walls knowledge seeking might
wet sand sinking rushing wrecking ball
disappearing disposition crushing bitter bite
Piece of Pie ala Mode 
the cleave is certainly a challenging form, I think you write it very well, although, reading them as separate poems, the meaning seems slightly different
I love the last line of this!
I remember doing these. It is challenging, but you’ve done such a good job with the form, as well as the use of the words.
Wow, you’ve really worked it! well done.
Very clever. I like it.
Yeah, well done! and good luck with napowrimo!
Nice job. Both poems stand well on their own, but there is also a unity to the entire work. I really like your use of alliteration with the images.
Well done!
~Mark
“brash bickering birds” I like the sound of it.
That is supercool. A classic Ms Pie poem with the musical phrasing and unique structure. I like this one a lot.
POP,
Nicely done indeed!
Pamela
You make it look easy – I couldn’t get my head around it to write one for myself.
a brilliant job with the execution. never have tried the form myself.. perhaps sometime soon! 🙂
I’m not familiar with this type of poem, but I love the energy in it, and certainly the “brash bickering birds” conjure familiar images. Nicely done.
This certainly appears to be a very difficult form of poetry. I think the others have summed it up, this is nicely done, clever, and you also make it seem easy.
I’ve never heard of this type of poem – it looks tricky. Love how yours turned out. Loved “there’s nothing here weeping”
What a fascinating poetical form! You did a beautiful job, and your imagery is evocative and fabulous.
It’s quite a difficult one to write…Cleave poem? Bound by many rules I guess, but I am sure it’s an exciting try if I would someday!
Thanks for sharing dear!
Nice! I like what you did with this. (I should have done shorter too perhaps.) This works very nicely and within the prompt form, well indeed.
Wow!! Its really nice and sounds so enchanting!! 🙂
I just came from the beach so I love the last stanza. Very true and well put
Very well written..loved the last line …..Awesome take on the prompt…
holy wow!
you made me sing through and chirp!