read write poem: day 8 napowrimo, unusual love connections. think of your current love, your current obsession or the one who got away and come up with five or more unusual metaphors for the object of your affection/obsession. got plenty of those regardless, romance is timeless.
tommyg’s three word wednesday: deviate, identify, saturate
photo: ianlk, flickr
separated by sincerity
we sit across an orgasmic ocean
lapping love licking
our suspended wounds
found by lovesick fate
a decorated table elucidate
scrutinizing sky blue eyes
melt away marvelous madness
your hands speak effortlessly
expecting a candid reply
deceptive dessert denies
a sweetened silver spoon
rescued revelation responds
a quick intoxicating kiss commute
the familiar fragrance
saturate our isolated eligibility
i once curled around
purring velvet trust
no longer hissing
silent salutation
don’t deviate
or try to explain
i stumble and stutter
freeze and fumble
persuasive perception
identify and confess
again your hands open
quick slow drowning splash
Piece of Pie ala Mode 
“quich slow drowning splash” Nice. =)
This is lyrical and was just such a pleasure to read.
The wave effect comes across well – great word placement.
peiceofpie,
This is so lyrical and well done.
Pamela
Yeah very nicely done, and the three little words too!
Your words sing. Nice work!
Wow–intense poem with wonderful alliteration! Love the last line.
Woohoo! And There it is. Lovely!
So beautiful.
Sublime….
I loved this. Sheer pleasure to read it..
waves of oceans in my glass
piece of pie,
thank you so much for your comment at my blog.
“quick slow drowning” does a great job evoking some powerful imagery and is a really effective last line. i noticed that in every stanza except #5 and #7, the third line is alliterated. ‘any thought to do the same in those stanzas? — you have a good ear for alliteration.
‘also have to tell you that i love the spare look and design of your blog! i think it’s my favorite of any blog i’ve ever seen. ‘great photo in above post, too.
loved reading it….wonderful…
The table and the eyes arrest. Fantastic!
Beautiful, deep and flowing.
Great flow to this, very deep poem!
I think I need a drink of water now.
ps. Thanks for stopping by!
licking our suspended wounds. loved that line – it says so much.
melt away marvelous madness – I that line a lot, the whole poem just oozes with delicate suggestions, or perhaps that’s not the right word, it seems like a conversation between two people who are in a relationship but don’t quite match as a couple – there’s my 2cents
Another nice post, I like it. I’ve read other posts around here and I learned a lot. Cudos.