saturday scribes: theme_change of plans; words_church, exploding, sinister
sunday scribblings: no 199 yes.
yes
i did say yes
in earnest honesty
my mind made up
packed and ready
turned off the light
closed the door
and left
when we stopped
at the gas station
you went to pay
for crunchy peanuts
and then i heard
a no very clearly
screaming really loud
exploding with fire
against the cold cool
clear night
i think it was about
2 in the morning
because it was still
dark
and then i remembered
something so soft
that sinister look
of distraction
when nothing goes well
Piece of Pie ala Mode 
Hell yes! I so want to read on… to know the next turn of phrase, the next link in this awesome chain…
Very cool. Surprising, and intriguing… makes me want to know more about what’s going on.
Thanks for playing over at Saturday Scribes! (This week’s prompts are up, btw).
i think intriguing is the word aptly summarize this poem. agree with the above comments, looks like a part 2 is brewing
enjoy how you blended the prompts!
thanks for stopping by my place.
cheers & peace,
jp/deb
Yes, you did say yes, I like the way you say Yes too!
woah. yes.
An epic tale in just these few words…well done.
You’ve left this one with a big question. It’s good to leave the reader intrigued.
Curious. What happens next ? Waiting for sequel. Very well done.
why the curious end 😦
YESSSSSSSS!
Now here’s a story told slant! I love the folding complexities of the relationship, why they’re out at 2 am, and the ambiguity at the end. I don’t think there needs to be a part 2. The reader brings it all together deliciously. That “hanging” sense of disaster works from within and without. Very nicely done.