with an awkward wind
the earth turned
a fatal turn
eternal spin
bumped by a breeze
damp with mold
corrupted minds
skeptics smiled
at the success
of failure
* * * * * * * *
poefusion Friday 5: awkward, uninterrupted, fatal, damp, skeptic
Photo: PrASanGaM, flickr


4 thoughts on “fracture

  1. That is great, the poem has wonderful sounds and the ending is brilliant. A dark poem turning into maybe a condemnation of scepticism and done with great grace and elegance. I haven’t seen such a dark and wonderful poem turn into that idea before, very cool.

  2. I like the way the words just falls in place, not really good as Paul at critiquing poems but it reads really well to me

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