crossing
the sea
sizzling hot sand
fiery
coarse sand
my feet burn
running
with everything
envision salty shores
emerse
singed soles
ignite cool waters
close
my eyes
swelling surf magnified
gentle
soothing breeze
heals the burn
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ReadWritePoem #35: fun iin the sun. write a poem about something uncomfortable related to sun or sand or heat or beaches ; photo: Beach, Matty20, flickr
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Lovely.
hot sand burning feet – then the cool water, lovely summer memory
There’s a great progression of verbs here leading up to “soothing.” I can really feel it.
I like the way these thoughts chain together – from the sizzling hot sand to the soothing breeze. Great wording.
I love the way the discomfort of the heat is relieved by the breeze and the cool water – beautifully captured.
i’ve always loved the feel of hot sand on the soles of my feet, then running towards the water to cool it off! these brought back so many memories of growing up in an island.
my favorite image: “close / my eyes / swelling surf magnified”. standing in the water with eyes closed does magnify the the other senses — moving surf all around you, never knowing when the next wave will come.