Poefusion Friday 5 prompt: kiss, train, fence, vale, simper. another 6S attempt. and, March Project at Cafe Writing Option 1 Fiction: To be interested in the changing seasons is a happier state of mind than to be hopelessly in love with spring.George Santayana. Write a flash-fic, scene, or short story about a happier state of mind.
Listening to the sound of the train traveling fast forward never stopped arousing the sense of freedom in her rambling simper heart. Resting impatiently she stared out the clear open window viewing the passage of seasons stirring within the fence of days known from sunrise to sunset. In-between those hours her companion would often turn from his engaging book and kiss her lips with a remote softness that left devoted desire unchecked. Smiling each time he would subtly assure her of their journey and the unfamiliar destination soon to come. Heading to a place she’d never known with a man she thought she knew sometimes made her want to turn another direction. Slowly the curtain of darkness disclosed the day’s end turning her thoughts back to the gentle movement of motion and remembering the vale of yesterday and how he spoke to her from there and the difference of him here now.
wow.. that was lovely and all in six sentences… i have ye tot try that but this makes me want to!!!!!
Isn’t it funny how a relationship can change so quickly in one’s mind? She already seems to be having second thoughts about her traveling partner. I have to wonder how long the relationship will last. I also have to hope that she can stick it out to see what other adventures await her. Hope your day went well.
you set quite a mood for this piece. I can picture her sitting there looking out and thinking. well done.
What a big story in such few lines.
This was very interesting to read and well written. I love trains,this gives a really expansive feeling to your story. Well done! G
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Perfect! I love ‘fence of days’ – nicely done!
OOh, like the entry. Good job! Heading for an unfamiliar destination with a man she thought she knew – very insightful, provocative phrasing.
A very interesting piece. Emotions captured well, scene is set beautifully. I liked the way you described ‘her’ mind, swinging like a pendulum….
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