untied.pu

dancing during intermission
drenched in the open seas
sunny stars burning bright
the ground slips away

swimming sensation of swaying
rhythmic tides excursion
playful harmony adrift

never-ending waves metamorphosis
revising the buried beast within
why would one aspire to reach shore

mermaid moments take flight
finding a future of freedom
the slurp of sea water signifies separation

poets united – midweek motif: success
three word Wednesday: aspire, beast, slurp

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8 thoughts on “untied.pu

  1. M.Z says:

    Great poem, really makes you think! A good take on success!

  2. Mary says:

    I loved the sounds in this poem. A poem to read aloud! I enjoyed especially ‘mermaid moments take flight.’

  3. Susan says:

    The dream of mermaid hood! Except I don’t know about being slurped into the sea. To me obtaining this freedom, this letting go, is almost too much. I remember reading “The Awakening” by Kate Chopin and thinking there too “What price freedom?” Regardless of your answer–this poem is beautiful, daring, actively separating. Bravo.

  4. kaykuala says:

    why would one aspire to reach shore

    Given what we have at hand, it is imperative that one desires to achieve what one sees as bidding one’s attention. Truly said ms pie!

    Hank

  5. jae rose says:

    After the run must come the lull..floating in the sea and magic..i loved your piece about the wolves also – works literally and as a metaphor..as i am sure is intended

  6. I like the lyrical effect of the poem.. it’s amazing !

  7. Lea says:

    I love this and where it has taken me…

  8. Amazing I love this! I felt like I was the mermaid out to sea never wanting to come back.

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