3ww.unheard
thom g’s 3ww. this week’s offer: adamant, fabricate, peculiar
day 7, napowrimo 2011
not very good at eye contact
he kept his head low
hiding a series of grunts
gruel for expression
most thought him peculiar
bantering fodder to innocent observers
adamant opus opine opinion
detained by sightless eyes enunciate
a vet who wanders still and quiet
leftover parts his fabricated heart
torn by turmoil life and death
his wife a burning flame
candle light constant
by window’s sight
her hope to follow
come home soon
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‘adamant opus opine opinion’ – powerful line…wonderful use of language..like we’re seeing his mind working underneath those down-turned eyes..most of all I am left with a sense of this lost man, waiting and waiting..Jae
I love that first verse. Very good use of prompt.
Excellent writing, such a rush of feelings tumbling about while reading this one. “candle light constant / by window’s sight” is a great thought. Deserves an intent rereading.
“gruel for expression”
yes!
very well written I loved this!
Wow. This piece, in it’s enfolding form, grabs the reader and forces a listening ear, brilliantly demanding a look at sad facts and the relationships that result. Well done.
Here is my late contribution:
http://www.kimnelsonwrites.com/2011/04/12/goddess-creates/