bees buzzin
thomg’s three word wednesday: figure, juicy, stress
photo: ernst haeckel, hummingbirds, art forms of nature
pestering emptiness
follows me home
like a peter pan shadow
gold dust and all
5 juicy fruit wrappers
expose an obsession
gum chewing chokes the
stress-lined distractions
busy bothering beauty
no one would know
to figure the noise
a humming bird flies
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Ms Pie,
Why haven’t I seen your blog before? I’m still finding my way around 3WW. This is fine work–great meter. No pure rhymes, but the whole piece sings. Now I have another blog I have to keep track of!
Those humming birds are so magical. Everything stops when the hovering winged creatures enter our yard.
Nice! That second stanza is a poem unto itself – very clever.
Beautiful and as Nico says, it sings!
This reads like lyrics with exceptionally strong imagery. Nice job!
I enjoyed your verse!
Lovely lilting lyrics, and a great picture to go with them.
Wonderful opening line..you’ve captured that emptiness perfectly…the ‘juicy fruit’ chewing was a great image…as the others say beautiful words and picture..Jae
Nice alliteration in the last stanza. I love hummingbirds. They’re frequent guests at on my father’s rural property.
You had me at the opening stanza. The feeling of loneliness really is pestering at times! Too bad there’s not a never never land for that….Or this there??
“no one would know
to figure the noise
a humming bird flies”
just wonderful.
I love the words that you choose/the words that choose you.
Hi Piece of Pie,
Beautiful poem, you blended the three words quite well into the verses. Thanks for sharing, and for the comment on my site also!
This really buzzes!!! I like it a lot. :<) Great use of each word.
Hummingbirds noise love that I could picture it all in my head.Lovely
Oh I love that.
Simple with a lot of meaning…
This piece had beautiful bounce and rhythm to it and I really love alliteration done well. Enjoyed it so much.
PS: Happy St. Patrick’s Day to you. Wishing you a very lucky day! G
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