spiracle retreat
one single impression: trembling
photo: Trapped, bikeracer, flickr
deciding to decide
there was little else to do
rebirth rebel ramble
turning twirling twice
surface seeking surveillance
passage way eyewitness
remember this
forget that
metamorphose fresh
emerging mindless
shivering inquietude
bringing no baggage
blindfolded bother
farm girl fantasy
sleeping in till 10
pink paint polish brush
toenails and fingernails
a full body massage
wrapped in reality
this tiny twittering escape
mimosa lavender descent
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I love the sound of this poem, even if it does make my head spin!
The 4th verse speaks volumes. Emerging mindless, as we all do… without baggage. When do we begin to lose that?
wonderfully written. love the use of alliteration in the haiku stanzas. it’s always great when one can forget everything and emerge refreshed. hope all is well. have a great day.
And we retreat into ourselves. Well, your sleeping farm girl does.
Did you know that crickets have spiracle valve?
I get the Willies following your verse here, it just doesn’t ever come to a pleasant ending!
Teach, did I do okay?
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This is quite the tongue twister…I like the flow of the poem a lot. Nicely written
the last stanza feels dream-like. beautiful!
amazing!
got tongue twisted trying to recite it along with my eyes! 
I like the way this sounds, the words seems to be make for each other
Lovely poem. The way your words seem to tremble out one on another. Love it.
Melanie
Delicious poem … love the alliteration!
JP/deb
This is a great piece, the alliteration is fantastic!
It totally swirls. I love it! Read it outloud
I love the ending, actually this was a wonderful ride entirely.
I love the alliteration used in this powm and the last line is amazing!
It’s like dancing, reading this. Nice
Interesting imagery. I like the last line, “mimosa lavender descent.”