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three word wednesday: opportunity quarrel service
photo: jamelah, flickr
existing on tiny bits of dull domesticity she was unexpectedly aroused to a simple opportunity glowing like a firefly. shaking the unaltered she headed toward the enticing eruption with little hesitation. recently in the service of one who lacked motivation there was no other way to break the quarrel other than leaping tall buildings, staying silent or heading towards an unwritten letter left to the winds. unwilling to resist, her sound reasoning escaped fast through the open night babbling unintelligible words that communicated nothing to her stimulated sense of impulse and what lies undiscovered. flinging the mundane she envisions her bare feet on transcendental shores smiling in wonder at the sudden sound of breaking the bonds of contractual commitment.
once upon a time in a far away land just south of the flowing river, the cool breeze of approaching change called out to the listening ear. previously unknown her life seemed whole as a domestic goddess in the land of everything….. suddenly desired change from her current existence. unwilling to compromise both willing and unwilling scattered to the four winds… shall i tell the rest.. or shall i leave it to you to your interpretation… that you leave with something… changed..
Lots of themes and vision to wrap my head around. You’ve got to read this one slow. It’s rich and the effort might be under-appreciated. I think it’s fine, maybe a word or two out of place, but then I read again and wonder if that’s what you meant.
this sounds to me like an ordinary woman but told in such a lovely way, it’s very much a poetry of wonderment
Wow! This is a powerful little piece! A walk in the head of thoughts…love it!
I couldnt figure out in my first read,and not even after d 2nd one.
But then I found there is something beautiful but still partly revealed.
“her sound reasoning..”
Liked dis part d most
~Harsha
thx thomg for yr comments as always… it is good to have critque of one’s work… experimenting with word combinations abrupt lines tho trying to keep the sense and flow…
as always lissa, ya get my stuff… *smilin*
<comin from you, thz awesome tw… *hugs* …hoping it’s not a flood but a cascading sorta write…
hi harsha… thank you for your thoughts… always love to hear responses especially when experimenting with words… sometimes it’s all abt sound reasoning the places it takes you.. or not… ..
changed…i like that!