observation

April 16, 2009

totally optional prompts: photo poems, this week, find an interesting photograph that has meaning for you and write a poem inspired by it; read write poem: napowrimo, day 16
photo: short journey home, maree10210, flickr

absent from her
he waits watching
his distant desire
interrupted
brake pedal pressed
for passing people

reliving her caress
a careless whisper
her simple subterranean eyes
suspended
he is suddenly bothered
by an ache
from rusty shrapnel
drenched in remission
she is
his contentment

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8 Comments

mrs. sarah ott permalink

there is a lot of certainty here. the description is definite, solid. i really like how you translate the mood. i mean looking at the image i have a mood which i pick up on right away but then your words just take it to the gut. sure miss reading your stuff. glad to finally have a moment to do so.
anthonynorth permalink

You get so much from the photo. Excellent.
Sweet Talking Guy.. permalink

Good observation, like the bit about rusty shrapnel!
gautami tripathy permalink

I was totally zapped by this!

mortal thoughts
Linda Jacobs permalink

I like how this tough guy admits his softness when thinking of her.
C. R. Stone permalink

Very passionate.
Melanie-bd permalink

This is just wonderful. I love your images and how your words flow so smoothly. I love it.

love-bd
Ofira Sephiroth permalink

Very passionate write.