Bones weekly three word wednesday
3WW No 9 prompt: touching, visible, stage
photo: kellyess12, photobucket
touching his face
for visible signs of life
she reacted to death
as another stage of existence
shared love spilling over
sorrows wet tears revealed
gathered in weightless
pebbles of grief
recalling a thousand moments
kissing him goodbye
she laid to rest
their love
on this side of eternity
discerning his soul take flight
day 14 NaPoWriMo…
4.20.08 / 2am
This is heartbreaking.
4.20.08 / 3am
So very sad but breathtakingly beautiful too. So perfectly expressed.
4.20.08 / 4am
This is incredibly sad, but beautiful to know they had a love like this. I hope you shared it with her.
4.20.08 / 5am
Beautifully written. Touching piece!
4.21.08 / 12am
we shared a vision on this one… very well done.. you did with poetry what i tried to do with flash fiction…
4.23.08 / 1am
You pulled me there – with her… it is hard to pull back to my own reality that he is here with me and not there.
5.22.08 / 2am
Pretty powerful writing on this one. You know it works when it brings a person or two people to mind when reading. Also, my eyes tearing up at the end is a good clue as well! I’ll be reading more.
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there’s no such thing as beginning at the beginning- just when would that be, and who would tell the story? but some moments in a life suggest a kind of punctuation: quick-stop comma, full-stop period, or the in between caesuras of semi-colon and colon. rosalyn brown, half a heart
photo: Punctuation, The Green Album
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